There were 3 kids named Jack, Zack and Rose. Jack was 9, Zack was 11 and Rose was 13. They all had a reason why they were lost in the forest. They were lost in the forest because Jack was playing soccer and he kicked the ball into the forest. Zack was playing rugby and he kicked the ball too far and it also went in the forest and Rose was running to her Nana's house which is in the forest and got lost on the way because she was running away from a dog that she was trying to steal from her next door neighbors, that's how she got lost in the forest.
While they were in the forest they all found this weird looking tree. They all went in circles around the tree and they found each other. Jack got scared and said “who are you 2?”
“I am Zack and I am 11 who are you?”
“ I am Jack and I am 9 who are you?” pointing to Rose.
“ I am Rose and I am 13”. They were like friends that have never met, Jack asked if they can work together to find their way back home, they all said yes. The two boys were scared but it was only because they were only like 9 and 11 but the girl wasn't scared at all because she was the oldest there.



So when they started to look for their way back home Jack found a bridge, it looked like it was old and rusted and it was in the middle of nowhere, he called out Zack and Rosi to come and look at what he found  and then they ran to him because Jack was the youngest one. They thought that he was in danger, they finally found him in a bush, then Jack said to come and look at what he found, it was a big broken bridge, it looked  like it was a bridge that was used for avoiding the crocodiles in the water, so they went on the bridge and when they were on the bridge it was tilting but they managed it. When they were about to make it across the wind moved the bridge, then the rope broke, but they jumped and made it to the other side safe and sound.


Then they made it back to town and went to their separate ways but when they were going to say goodbye, tears came out of their eyes, Zack said “don’t cry”. When they left there weren't any tears coming out because they knew if they get lost in the forest again  they hope to meet again.



My reflection:
Strengths:
I was good at writing about bad stuff that became good stuff because I got some help with it and I already had an idea about what was going to happen in the story.
I was good at explaining what was there in the story because I was imagining the person or a thing by looking around me and there were heaps of clues.
Next steps:
I need to work on my spelling and making my writing much more interesting because that was not that interesting.        
I need to work on my characters and their parts in the story and choose a better setting.
I need to put capital letters and full stops in my sentences and proofread to check this.
I need to use speech marks to show who’s talking.  



























































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